Post by Akiyamasan on Sept 9, 2012 23:29:31 GMT -5
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Hello chemicals! I'm Akiyamasan, or superanonymousperson if you peer about the chatbox at all, and I'll be assisting you with the character creation process today.
The first thing I had noticed is that the way you wrote your profile is fairly different from how others wrote theirs, using a first person narrative instead of a third person description. I'm not going to ask you to change it, as your writing is fairly strong and shows a measure of skill with the process, and your formatting for the profile thus far was spot on.
I noticed as well that your character's abilities are rather tame. Infact, both your shikai and bankai thus far only have a few passives to speak of. This is okay as well, but if you don't want to feel outmatched or so by the other captains, you might want to try adding some more special abilities to your character.
Of note, I will respect your desire for no Kido; but the first four are absolutely free. If at a later date you decide you want to add kido to your character, you can message someone at any time and acquire up to four for free.
Thank you, and welcome to the website!